SPRING BREAK 2010
This Spring Break 2010, i do not did something quite exciting, but i did went to Guadajalara for the 2 weeks. First day, i just arrived and relax all day, the next days, and weeks, i went shopping, to the mall, and the ranch of my grandfather. The next weeks, i just had fun at my grandmother's house, with my cousins.
When i went to the ranch, my cousins and i get into the pool, but the problem was that the pool did not had water, and we had to get all the water that was in there, clean it perfectly and then put the new fresh water into the pool. But we had fun doing it. My mother, put some eggs and we´ve got to find them, and the one who grabbed more eggs, would have a sorprise.
My last vacations days, i went to San Diego.. There I do not had too much fun because I just went for one day to a wedding, but i meet a boy, he is 16 years old, and very nice. In the wedding i just dance a little bit with the guy, see all the people was there, and participate on the games the boyfriend and girlfriend had.
This Spring Break 2010, i do not did something quite exciting, but i did went to Guadajalara for the 2 weeks. First day, i just arrived and relax all day, the next days, and weeks, i went shopping, to the mall, and the ranch of my grandfather. The next weeks, i just had fun at my grandmother's house, with my cousins.
When i went to the ranch, my cousins and i get into the pool, but the problem was that the pool did not had water, and we had to get all the water that was in there, clean it perfectly and then put the new fresh water into the pool. But we had fun doing it. My mother, put some eggs and we´ve got to find them, and the one who grabbed more eggs, would have a sorprise.
My last vacations days, i went to San Diego.. There I do not had too much fun because I just went for one day to a wedding, but i meet a boy, he is 16 years old, and very nice. In the wedding i just dance a little bit with the guy, see all the people was there, and participate on the games the boyfriend and girlfriend had.
Your spring break vacations sounded fun. you passed time with your family. I really wanted to go to Guadalajara and go shopping just like you. The wedding sounded very interesting. Is obvious that you gave to much fun. Even though you think your vacations weren't not that exited as you wanted, you passed happy moments. I hope your summer vacations will be much exiting for you.
ReplyDeleteYour Vacation sounds like a lot of FUN. Going to USA for just one day should have been awsome!The ranch, i think is a perfect place to go for spring break even more fun with your cousins.You did the most amazing thing to do "shopping". Some people would see it as dumb but I think it's an awsome thing becauseyou explore different cultures and you learn about society and things like that. Yoppu're a Lucky gir to have found a cute guy. The best of all is that he will remeber you and you'll remember him from the day of the wedding.Traveling to manyh places should have been interesting for just 14 dyas. I can see by how you wrote that you wish you could have stayed more time in San Diego.I hope you had an awsome time in your holidays and that you stay in contact with your friends and cousisns. I also hope you show off your new colthes.
ReplyDeleteI'm going to be honest here. I really liked your type of vacation... but to be honest, your type of writing just frustrates me. It makes want to rip my hair off. I would really like if you could at all improve your writing, but as I know, it is physically impossible for you. I know you don't have any kind of disease (I hope so), but you totally act like you have one. So, in conclusion, yes, your vacation was fine, exciting, but your way of describing it is HIDEOUS!
ReplyDeleteDebora and Lauraa Thank You (:
ReplyDeleteRodrigo, if this fustrates you, so why did you read it!!! stop bothering and fine something else to do rather than getting drunk in parties and throwing up!! and consuming drugs !! PLEASE (: WITH LOVE MARIFER :)
ReplyDeleteI do not consume drugs or drink, those things are for people like you. You freak, I did not even finish reading it, I read the freaking first sentence, then my eyes hurt like hell. So stop smoking pot like you do everyday, I do not consume any type of illegal substance.
ReplyDeleteApparently you dominate time and matter. How many vacations did you have? You mentioned you went into the pool but there was no water, yet, you had to clean the water in the pool? Are you God? You also mentioned that the first weeks (plural meaning 2) you did some stuff and later you did some other stuff on other weeks (plural). We only had 2 weeks of vacations... are you the Titan Cronos or something? Nevertheless, Gods do not have bad grammar. I think that you should get a tutor and just to conclude I think that you had a very boring yet exciting (for the time traveling and stuff) vacation.
ReplyDeleteYour vacation sounds like a pretty fun thing. Although, i thought it was kind of short. Maybe you
ReplyDeleteshould think about making your sentences a little bit more elaborated in order to make it have more
sense.I loved the fact that you went to San Diego but did no shopping, because I did! I love shopping
there, and especially in Fashion Valley. Anything you are looking for can be found there. Apart from
that it seems like this vacation is a lot like mine. But i will pressure again about the way that you write.
It would make the reader a lot happier to read if it had more information and detail. Or else it feels like
we are reading an old essay. Yes, that bad. Well i hope my comment might help you in the future.
Your vacations sounds very good. I hope you had a lot of fun. Still, you have to improve your writing, check your post twice to don't make a spelling mistake. The post should be four paragraphs long and you just did three very short paragraphs.
ReplyDeleteIt sounds like you had a vacation for far more than two weeks, maybe two months...? You described as doing many things in an exagerated period of time. You also mention the fact of cleaning water in a waterless pool. You also forgot to write a proper introduction to parts like the easter thing. Overall, it sounds like you had a great vacation, the problem was that you couldn't express the events properly. Next time, you may want to pay more attention to the body of the essay. With the constructive critique said, I hope you put some more effort into your essay.
ReplyDeleteFer corzo. Thank You i loved your comment!! <3
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ReplyDeleteYou suck a lot you are soo mean and you dont care what other people feel. You are a drogadict and a stupid guy. I hate you so much Mushroom!(:
EDUARDO
I really dont care what did you comment... because im normal y do not consume any types of insects as you do, and im prettier than you are so shut up! (:
SEBASTIAN
The lenght doesnt care. And really you are true I need to make one more comment and even more longer my paragraphs but i did not did a lot so stop bothering me! and find a life you people !!!
JORGE..!!
ReplyDeleteThank you but i really dont care!!
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ReplyDeleteAre you brain dead? I never said you consumed any insects and what does beauty have to do with this interaction... I guess you are brain dead...
ReplyDeleteJORGE I LOVE YOU!! (:
ReplyDeleteEDUARDO SHUT THE FUCK UP!!!!
ReplyDeleteFirst of all, it's drug addiction, not DROGADICT, you ignorant. If you want to say about things I do, please do find a reliable source, for you do not even know me. You simply see me at school, so get lost. BRAIN DAMAGE.
ReplyDeleteHAHAHAHA sorry but I can't help but to laugh at all those comments. The worst part is that yes, I do agree with Rodrigo, Eduardo, and Jorge. The problem, Marifer, is that you have to proof read. Even get a tutor! I would tell you, as they have told you before, to make your paragraphs longer. This is not the assignment we were asked to do, but just random sentences put together. Try to make your paragraphs longer, include a introduction sentence, a conclusion sentence, and a BODY. When you say " i do not did something quite exciting" it just DOESN'T make ANY sense at ALL. You are having the word DO two times, when you say DO NOT and DID. Also, I don't really want to be heard as being mean but, are you a Goddess or something? You cleaned, as Jorge said, the water from a WATERLESS pool. That is like saying you wrote this entry without a computer.. which is even more believable. It sounds as if you were a Goddess too when you mention "weeks" SEVERAL of times. We just had a two week break, maybe you should learn to distinguish from days and weeks. There are seven days in one week. We had fourteen days of vacations. It sounds as if you had some months of fun! Try proof reading, as I said before. You have many spelling and grammar mistakes. You also mix ideas. You are first cleaning the water from a waterless pool and then you are hunting eggs RIGHT NOW! It says WE HAVE TO go find the eggs, so are they still lost? Maybe your mom does know how to hide eggs pretty well. About YOUR own comments, I really don't appreciate them. I know our ideas are a bit harsh, but that's what you get if you don't proof read your work! That is how life rolls, you get criticized to move on. We are all here just to help you, not to make fun of you. I think the smartest idea would be to have an English tutor that can help you with all of your homework.
ReplyDeleteWOW seems that you had so much fun this year in spring break diwn at Guadalajara. MAybe next time you can take me with you. It sounds so intresting. You are so lucky that you spended time with your family beacuse I dont have any family in Puerto Vallarta or even near it. Im glad you had so much fun but next time dont have too much fun without me. (:
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